Well since everyone is dead here guess i'll shine some light on it. The colours used in everything but the big text is bland is heck, the main text is over saturated compared to the entire piece. the text "suicidal graphics" is way too blurry and technically speaking way to dark to read properly. It also seems that the background and the character are on 1 layer so the sense of depth is gone.
Also i don't know if you ment to have those staggered lines, cause it seems like a side product of a low Q gradient or something. + i think i spot some random out of place c4d's.
on a last note, what is with you using a paper texture style. makes it look like it orignally was a GIF export rather than a high quality png.